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Comments on Carry That Weight

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From: exeterlinden (exeterlinden@hotmail.com)
Date: 01/01/2007
As someone else also said, I really like how their relationship isn't the focus of this story - at least not their romantic relationship - because there's strong feelings involved in this, between them, still. It just seems very right for the characters, their actions and the dialogue and their protectiveness over each other.
From: Eledh (eledhwenlin@gmail.com)
Date: 12/29/2006
Oh, poor Ray! It's a very sad story, but wonderfully done.
From: Alexis (alexis.muirhead@gmail.com)
Date: 12/26/2006
Nice work with this! I liked seeing an involved-in-the-community Ray, and you did a good job of slowly revealing just what happened and why. I also like the way Ray and Fraser's domestic situation wasn't really a focus of this piece, but you provided it as a way to help Ray deal with what he was going through. Good job!
From: Elizabeth (omphale23@gmail.com)
Date: 12/24/2006
This is wonderful! Strong voices, and such a wrench when the pieces all click and we find out exactly what happens. Thanks *so much* for doing a lovely job with a kind of terrible prompt.

*squees and frightens the kitten*

I really loved the way that the actions told the story, and how everything came together slowly into a picture of Ray, and Fraser, and how hard it can be.

I found lots of lines that I thought were were just perfect, but I think this bit is my absolute favorite:

"That just makes it worse. Because, Frase, when I thought he'd --that you'd -- all I could think was, I couldn't protect you. And I wanted to kill him. I didn't care that he was a stupid, scared kid that only a few hours ago I was proud to call a friend. I'm supposed to care."

It sounds just like Ray, and it says so much about the two of them here.

Yay! This is awesome! Thank you!

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